In this awesome scheme of things you'll get an A just for effort. Where exactly you confused everybody was first on your details. You know, people say, details make or break the argument.. And that couldn't be much more correct here. Having said that, allow me reveal to you just what exactly did work. The writing is definitely extremely powerful which is possibly why I am making the effort in order to comment. I do not really make it a regular habit of doing that. Secondly, even though I can see a leaps in reason you come up with, I am not really sure of exactly how you seem to unite the points that produce the final result. For right now I will yield to your issue however wish in the near future you connect the facts better.